Sadly Dreaming excerpt

An excerpt from my upcoming novel, Sadly Dreaming. Let me know what you think.

As she was walking home, she heard someone walking behind her.

Knowing she didn’t have any neighbors, she started walking faster, twigs and dead leaves crunching beneath her shoes. The person behind her kept walking faster like they were trying to catch up to her. Suddenly, she felt herself running through the forest in the direction of her house. It was then that Ellie realized that she would be leading this person back to her house, so she began running in a completely different direction of her house but the person behind her caught up to her and grabbed her from behind and carried her away. Ellie started screaming but the man carrying her covered her mouth and no one could hear her high pitched screams that would have spread through out the forest.

Ellie kicked and squirmed in the man’s arms but it was no use. She was thrown into a car and a rolled up towel was tied over her mouth and the man tied up her hands. He slammed the car door and got in the front seat and started to drive away. Ellie screamed and squirmed in the back seat of the car until the car stopped at a building and the man got out of his car, opened the door where Ellie was, and pulled her out, restricting her from all movement.

He carried her into a concrete building and inside there was blood covering the floor and a very old, rusty knife spattered with blood sat in the middle of the room and it seemed to stare at Ellie as she was brought into the room. The man threw her on the floor of the room and reached into his pocket and pulled out a small flask filled with lighter fluid and he poured it in a circle around her as she cried, spitting out the towel in her mouth. He got out a book of matches, lit one and threw it on the ground in the puddle of lighter fluid, making it catch on fire. Ellie could feel the heat all around her, her hair starting to sear off.

“Help!” she yelled. The man slapped her in the face and grabbed the knife from the middle of the room. His hand moved swiftly and he stabbed her straight in the heart.

Ellie felt the wind knock out of her and for only a few more seconds, she could feel the sharp pain in her chest until everything went black. The man pulled out the knife and threw it back to where it was lying in the first place. He put out the fire with a bucket of water he left in the corner and picked up Ellie’s body, carrying it back outside where he already had a hole dug to hide a body and many piles of dirt were around the hole showing that other bodies had already been buried there.

He carelessly threw Ellie’s cold, motionless corpse into the four foot deep hole and began to throw dirt over her body until the hole was completely filled.

thats pretty awesome dude. the pov being the victim of a muder is really cool. thanks for sharing

monkeybone2001 wrote:thats pretty awesome dude. the pov being the victim of a muder is really cool. thanks for sharing

Thank you That means alot, coming from you.......

this is hotttttt i wish i was ellie

d34thn0t3luvr wrote:this is hotttttt i wish i was ellie

Oh….. My intention in writing this wasn’t to be seen as sexual….. It was meant to communicate the fear of someone experiencing a random act of violence. Though I guess as the reader you may interpret it as you will…..

Incredible work simon… i throughly enjoy your descriptions of violence. i look forward to seeing more from you, you’re an excellent author.

Thank you, Blood Your words are inspiring me to write even more……